Student Sample Reading

1. I thought this paper seemed a little uneducated. Like for example, he/she seemed to repeat themseleves a lot, and tell us what they were going to talk about instead of actually doing it (Show then tell). Is it, or is this how ours are supposed to be?
2. Do we need to talk more about our own thoughts in each annotated bibliography?
3. I think he/she did a good job of answering the questions proposed at the begining.